"Similar to most inventions in history, computers have revolutionized our lives, particularly in the field of education. First, computer technology has made lectures more accessible as students can now attend classes without having to leave their homes. Second, students easily access numerous databases simply by entering a few keywords. Third, as opposed to handwriting, typing essays takes less time and, thanks to spell-checking programs, the likelihood of making typos has decreased drastically. Because of the advent of computers in education, we can improve our knowledge and save precious time. Academic life will never be the same and will result in a more dynamic learning experience for many. Some say students are more open to the use of technology than teachers."

(Adapted from Folse, 2014, p. 22)

Above is the conclusion paragraph of an essay about the benefits of computer technology in education. What do you think is wrong with it?

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"Similar to most inventions in history, computers have revolutionized our lives, particularly in the field of education. First, computer technology has made lectures more accessible as students can now attend classes without having to leave their homes. Second, students easily access numerous databases simply by entering a few keywords. Third, as opposed to handwriting, typing essays takes less time and, thanks to spell-checking programs, the likelihood of making typos has decreased drastically. Because of the advent of computers in education, we can improve our knowledge and save precious time. Academic life will never be the same and will result in a more dynamic learning experience for many. Some say students are more open to the use of technology than teachers."

(Adapted from Folse, 2014, p. 22)

Above is the conclusion paragraph of an essay about the benefits of computer technology in education. What do you think is wrong with it?

BlackTom AI · Accepted Answer

First, we'll restate the question and the answer choices to set the context for analysis. The question asks what is wrong with the conclusion paragraph of the essay about computer technology in education. The answer options are:
- It does not give a summary of main points
- It introduces a new idea
- It does not have a restatement of the author's argument.
- No answer text provided.

Option 1: It does not give a summary of main points.
- The conclusion actually mentions several specific points from the essay (lectures become more accessible, databases are easily accessed, typing is faster and has fewer typos), which are typical elements of a summative conclusion. So claiming it fails to summarize main points is inaccurate because the paragraph does recap the main benefits before drawing a general positive outcome.
- A user might think a conclusion should restate the thesis more explicitly or tie everything together, but the presence of listed benefits does constitute a summary of the main points, albeit in brief form.

Option 2: It introduces a new idea.
- This option correctly flags a potential issue: the sentence “Some say students are more open to the use of technology than teachers.” introduces a perspective not directly presented in the body of the essay. The body discusses benefits and effects of computer technology in education, but it does not establish or explore this particular claim about openness by students versus teachers. Introducing this new idea at the close can feel out of place and not integrated with the rest of the argument.
- The presence of this additional claim can disrupt the coherence of the conclusion because it shifts focus from the established benefits to a separate social perception without connecting it to the thesis.

Option 3: It does not have a restatement of the author's argument.
- The conclusion does seem to restate the general argument that computer technology enhances education and time efficiency, with phrases like “Because of the advent of computers in education, we can improve our knowledge and save precious time.” and “Academic life will never be the same and will result in a more dynamic learning experience.” These lines echo the essay’s central claim. Therefore, saying it lacks a restatement is not accurate.

Option 4: No answer text provided.
- There is indeed answer text provided in the prompt, so this option is irrelevant to the given question.

Overall, the strongest issue with the conclusion is that it introduces a new idea not developed in the body, which can be jarring for readers looking for a tight, cohesive ending. The other options misinterpret the paragraph's content in light of how conclusions typically function in essays.

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